College experience is different for everyone, some people want the
full college experiences like party's and meeting different people who your not
used to meeting at a big name school for example, UCLA, Florida, Texas, Etc.
But there are still people who don't want the big college experience, they just
want a normal college experience, I'm kind of one of those people who want a
normal college experience.
My sister was successful in her high school Career; won multiple
awards both educational and sports, which has helped her get into the naval academy.
I felt that it was also be beneficial for me and my family that I should get
the best education also, that fits me both social and educationally. I feel
that Menlo College is a good fit for me because Menlo is a small private school
that is strong academical in management and business, and I would like to have
a career in managing sports.
YOUR ESSAY IS INCOMPLETE AND I NEED TO KNOW THE PROMPT IN ORDER FOR ME TO SEE IF YOUR ESSAY IS FULFILLING ITS PURPOSE. AND WHAT IS THE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN BIG COLLEGE EXPERIENCE AND NORMAL COLLEGE EXPERIENCE? IT DOESNT MAKE SENSE, THOSE ARE TWO CATEGORIES THAT DONT RELATE TO EACH OTHER. AND WHY IS YOUR SISTER IN THE STORY? THEN YOU QUICKLY TRANSITION TO HOW YOU WANT TO GO TO MENLO? YOU NEED TO SPEND MORE TIME AND EFFORT ANSWERING THE COLLEGE PROMPT AND MAKING SURE THE PURPOSE IS CLEAR. AS(1)
ReplyDeleteProvide the prompt before you essay so that, what you're writing about, can be understood better. Also, explain more about your sister. Why does her college experience impact your choices and opinions on college?
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